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Sazzafrazz: The Dory of the Beast Wars

Posted: Sat Oct 18, 2008 2:44 am
by Tor
Hey People!

Lately I've been working on a series, the title is yet to be decided (meaning I can't sum up da story in a cool sounding phrase), and I just wanted to post dis to get some feed back. *note: I did post dis conversation on another thread

Bruce (which stands for BRUte forCE) meets Sazzafrazz.

"You're a Maximal?"

"An animal? You bet'cha." She grinned up at me, no hint of sarcasm, just innocence.

"No." I said sounding out the word for her, "Max-i-mal."

"Is that a club or something?" she tilted her head to one side.

"No a faction...."

"Fact-what?"

"A Maximal is a part of a faction." I threw my hands up in exasperation.

"What's that?"

"What?"

"A Maximal." Still no sacrasm in her tone.

"I just told you."

"Just told me what?" her visor bunched in the middle, expression clearly confused.

"What a Maximal is."

"An animal? I think I'm one of those."

I smacked forehead, leaving a dent in my helmet.

*End of conversation*

Well dere it is. Please o please gimme your feedback!

Th-th-th-that's all folks,
tor

Posted: Sat Oct 18, 2008 3:04 pm
by Razorclaw
Brilliant,Tor! Yesssss! :P I do believe I see a storyline here...

Posted: Mon Oct 20, 2008 6:08 pm
by Tor
Hey People!

Tanks Razorclaw! I love dat you love it! But I was tinking dat Bruce is going to be moved into a seperate storyline. But perchance he will stay. *rubs temples* Writing a fanfic is sooo hard! Anyone else have dese problems? Or is just my brain that's malfunctionin?

Anywho, I really do have to go to play practice now...
tor

Posted: Mon Oct 20, 2008 8:35 pm
by Razorclaw
What play are you in? I love theature too...and roleplay. :D

Posted: Tue Oct 21, 2008 6:59 pm
by Tor
Hey RC!

Weeeeell since youz asked, I'm in Happy Daze. Its a comedy (I heart comedy) bout a teen who is da odd one out at school. He has dis GINOURMOUS crush on dis girl named Melonie, but after his date gone bad wid her he retreats into a world all his own.

G2G,
tor