The Nightmares of her World

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The Nightmares of her World

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I just thought I'd share this with everyone. It was not something I necessarily wrote to apply to Arachnitron, but it sort of does. It was something I wrote after awakening from a horrible nightmare one night (this was several nights in a row that I didn't sleep because of nightmares) and writing was the only way I could get back to sleep.

Anyway, I hope you enjoy!

The Nightmares of her World

She holds her head in her hands as she tries to erase the nightmares of another sleepless night.
Every exhausted bone in her body desperately wants to sleep, but she's scared to close her eyes.
She thought she was free of the demons that haunt her night after endless night.
She thought she was saved, but her world still falls apart.

Her world.
That which by any other name would still fade completely.

Her world.
Blue eyes seeing only darkness.
Black soul slowly turning to stone.

Her world.
An explosion of terror and rage. Two emotions, dangerous on their own. Even more so together. Two merciless emotions that destroy and conquer her ever breaking world.

Her world.
A rollar coaster ride of conflicting emotions. Emotions with no name, but she can feel them. Quick, describe them before the cars fly off the track! Too late....she couldn't describe them anyway.

Her world.
A stream of confusion that threatens to pull her under. She swims against the current and goes nowhere. The waves are too strong; they push her back. She's drowning in her confusion.

She grabs on to a thin, fraying string. The only thing left that holds her world together. Don't break it! She'll be gone forever.

Did her world look like this three months ago?
Did her world always look like this?
She doesn't remember.
She closes her eyes and pleads: Don't let me remember!

She breathes easier now. Her heart stops racing. No! Don't wake her! She's had a long night and it isn't over yet. The rotting fragments of her world will test her again.

She's dying inside.
Will anyone save her?
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Is poetic a bad way to describe somebody's poetry?

...Yes. I'm pretty sure. But it is poetic.

I do like the use of the address to an unspoken "you", though it makes me wonder who you is.

Is "her world" the waking world or the dreaming world?

And are you feeling any better?
I understand... you are, after all, a predacon.

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Blazemane wrote:Is poetic a bad way to describe somebody's poetry?

...Yes. I'm pretty sure. But it is poetic.


Not sure if that's a compliment. lol.
Is "her world" the waking world or the dreaming world?


Hmmm.....I think both....
And are you feeling any better?
Much better! Thank you!
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Blackrosefencer wrote:
Blazemane wrote:Is poetic a bad way to describe somebody's poetry?

...Yes. I'm pretty sure. But it is poetic.


Not sure if that's a compliment. lol.
It is a compliment, just not a very helpful one. By which I mean this totally reads like a poem- it has descriptive, lyrical word choice, makes interesting shifts in sentence structure and point of view, etc.

Oh. Hey. That's better.
you wrote:
I wrote:Is "her world" the waking world or the dreaming world?


Hmmm.....I think both....
I was wondering if that was the case.
that one wrote:
this one wrote:And are you feeling any better?
Much better! Thank you!
Good to hear.
I understand... you are, after all, a predacon.

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